Do Not Bury the Lead

8 April 2013 by Matt Shipman, posted in Uncategorized

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The opening lines of any written work are essential. This is true of news stories, blog posts and novels, and I’ve written about it before. But I forgot to mention an important point that all news writers (including bloggers) should bear in mind: you need to tell the reader right away why they should bother reading what you wrote. In other words, do not “bury the lead.”

The lead (rhymes with greed) is the news hook of the story: What’s new about this? Why is it interesting? Why are you telling me about this now? Burying the lead means making the reader go through several paragraphs (or more) before getting to the point of the article/story/post. A writer who buries the lead usually does so by laying out exposition, setting up a framework to support an argument before the argument is made. This is completely normal at an early stage of a writer’s career. Many, maybe even most, reporters start out writing this way — until their editors teach them the error of their ways.

The lead should not be confused with the “lede” (also rhymes with greed), which is the first paragraph of a news story. These two things should be more or less synonymous, because you should probably have your news hook in the first paragraph of the story (or possibly the second). But I want to distinguish between a lead and a lede because when you bury your lead, it’s nowhere near your lede.

I was reminded of this by a recent conversation with a promising science writer whose background and training are as a scientist. The science writer, whom I will call Writer X, sent me something they had written and asked me to look it over. It was an interesting piece that contained all the relevant information a reader would need, but the material needed some reorganization.

Here’s how that conversation went:

Me: Ah, I see. You buried the lead. You don’t get to the thrust of the post until the second half of the fourth paragraph. No worries. Now that you’ll be on the lookout for that, you won’t do it again. Everyone makes this mistake when they're getting started.

Writer X: Thanks! I appreciate the feedback. I want to get this right. I had an epiphany that I do this even in grant and article writing — I write it like a mystery novel, springing the main point on the reader at the end.

Me: But mystery novels don’t spring the main point on the reader at the end. The murder happens in the beginning! That's what gets you hooked. But there’s always just a little more information pulling the reader along.

Writer X: Good call! I’ve been putting the lead in the big reveal of the killer at the end and forgetting the murder.

We also discussed ways to re-craft the lede to reflect the lead, and Writer X clearly understood what I was getting at.

Remember this: with the possible exception of your parents, readers are under no obligation to read anything you’ve written. If you want them to read what you wrote, you need to tell them what you are writing about — and why — before they lose interest.

3 Responses to “Do Not Bury the Lead”

  1. Khalil A. Cassimally Reply | Permalink

    One strategy that numerous publications are adopting is having a one-line lede which basically hooks the reader in (or at least attempts to do so). This then allows for a more natural narrative to follow.

  2. Alex Reply | Permalink

    While I agree with your main idea here (ie never waste a word), I'm not sure the reasons for "hooking" a reader are the same across genres. People decide to read (and to keep reading) different types of material for different reasons. Sure, in the case of News Consumer Hulk ("HULK WANT 5 W AND 1 H NOW") the first sentence needs to contain the whole story, and then you want an inverted pyramid of detail. But feature-style articles need a different kind of hook, like you alluded to in the case of the murder-mystery: a reason for people to keep going. I think the "read on to find out more" is fundamentally different between these two.

    Within blogs the diversity is all the greater. A news-style post will follow (some of) the rules of "traditional" news writing, whereas as more "feature-y" posts might be different. Many longform posts do not get to "The point" until hundreds of words in. In the case of books it can be even longer. I think writers can get away with this kind of thing because their expositions and introductions are good enough in the first place, though I suppose an interesting title might help, too.

  3. Jacquelyn Reply | Permalink

    I love this post! This metaphor is so useful. It's also such a nice illustration of how blogging can actually really help out with in other kinds of writing, too!

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